Question by Guru S: What kind of thesis could I use for national security vs personal freedom?
I’m writing about why we need a balance. Heres my thesis but I dont think its very good. The issue of national security versus personal freedom is an intricate one, and a delicate balance of both is crucial.
Best answer:
Answer by travis a44
is very intricate*
other then that i think you did well.
i believe in strong personal freedom. but i write your paper for you. you have your own opionion
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Sunshine
December 2, 2010 at 11:35 pm
Your thesis introduces a great idea and really does make me want to read more. However, I do have to say that it is slightly vague.
I would change it a little bit to make it sound a little bit more professional and well rounded.
Here is what I would write, however, it is just a suggestion!
The delicate balance between national security and personal freedom is an intricate issue which involves… (some examples of what you are going to discuss throughout your paper)
Or
The intricacy involved in balancing between national security and personal freedom is one that must be treated with the utmost caution in order to maintain stability.
I normally do not like putting a ton of examples in a thesis, but yours kind of needs a little more detail, if you understand what I mean.
I hope this helps you out at least a little!